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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Jan 9, 2011 1:37:05 GMT -5
Click here for the roleplay.I was hoping to get some feedback on my roleplay. First thing I've ever done for any e-fed. Don't hold back, feel free to give me all the criticism you'd like, though preferably constructive. (Hope you'll excuse any stupid phrase/spelling/grammar errors I might have made, English isn't exactly my first language.)
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Post by Josh Eagles on Jan 9, 2011 1:43:43 GMT -5
Let me say this is one of the best intro rp's I have ever read. I liked how it truly began to give us a sense of your character, some interesting story arc and background history, but really also brought a different look at joining a fed. A character being recruited and wanting to be apart of that fed and thinking about what he wanted to do. It was very unique and def leaves me wanting more.
I am not 100% sold on the overall writing style because it's a dev rp it's hard for me to see how you bring this into match context. I'd love to see if you can continue to develop the story of Rolan as well as include opponents into your writing and keep that same level. Overall very good, very solid.
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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Jan 9, 2011 1:48:53 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback! :3 To be honest I kindof disappointed myself on the last bit, I wanted to do a lot more detail and in fact there's an entire section I left out 'cause I was tired but wanted to get it done tonight.
And I thank you very much for the compliments, good to hear that it's liked and I look forward to attempting to impress you in the future, and hopefully, can do so. Thanks!
~Galen
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