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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Jan 10, 2011 20:37:00 GMT -5
Well, first ever roleplay I've done for a match in an e-fed. Hope to get some feedback, good or bad, I welcome it all.
~Galen
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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Jan 11, 2011 19:52:02 GMT -5
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Post by chriswilliams on Jan 11, 2011 20:20:15 GMT -5
This is REALLY your first efed? Because that was a fantastic RP, and it definitely seems like you've done this before. As a first promo, I liked the character development at the beginning, and then full-out match relevance at the end. I would say your only opportunity for improvement on this promo is that I'd like to see the same amount of detail in your speech-narration and dialogue as we do in the scene description. Other than that, phenomenal job.
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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Jan 11, 2011 20:22:28 GMT -5
Thanks for the feedback. I'll see if I can do that, but honestly I prefer description to dialogue... I've always found it a lot easier, possibly due to language stuff, I don't know.
To answer your first question, it is my first e-fed, but not the first time I've roleplayed.
~Galen
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Adam Abel
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Post by Adam Abel on Jan 11, 2011 23:58:15 GMT -5
I thought it was really well done as well. I appreciate the fact that you are a really good writer and it makes everything flow so much easier. Good work bud!  |
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