"The Most Important Promise" Series - Feedback

[chriswilliams]

I will start this off by saying that these two pieces are not original works for the KoP, that is why I have posted them in the Character Development section. Over the years, I have tweaked these two pieces, along with other Char. Dev. RPs, to best show an accurate picture of Williams - why he is wrestling, what he thinks about, his general attitude, etc. I post them whenever I join a new fed, as most people obviously will not have seen Williams or my work before.

So with that being said, I do usually like to know what you guys think of these two pieces, so go nuts! And don't hold back, I take criticism like a champ.

[Adam Abel]

I've always been a fan of your work, and this is no exception. I believe I read the graveside one (or something close like it) in PWA but it still fits here very well.

I'm looking forward to more as always!

["The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan]

I really enjoyed them, actually - I loved the development of W.'s character, loved the introduction to the character, loved the revelation of his motivations and why he does things and why he does things the way he does them. Great flow, great structure, great... everything, really.

...In addition the father kinda reminded me of Kamina. <.< >.>

~Galen