Feedback you say?

[That New Guy]

So I rarely look for feedback when I join a fed, not because I feel I don't need it. I love feedback, just past instances have had me grow weary of the whole concept. But never the less, I want to know what you guys think of my recent role play. All criticism is welcomed, tips and things along those lines are as well.

"Things Aren't Always What They Seem" - www.pridewrestling22.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=oblivionroleplays&action=display&thread=2035

[chriswilliams]

For me, it was a great story to read, but it definitely felt like much more Character Development than a match roleplay. Only two or three sentences were actually devoted to your match ahead, but I guess considering that you have just joined as well, it would help to get more of a glimpse into character.

Outside of that, as I said - solid story. I think you'd do well to take 5 minutes to proofread it before posting, as there were a couple of times where the sentence. Just stopped. Like this. Haha, in all honesty though, that is a small concern, as it doesn't take away too much from the roleplay.

I think it was well done, and can't wait to see some more of your work!

["The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan]

I enjoyed it. I liked the brevity, I liked that it developed the character without going overboard, and while the match relevance felt a little bit tacked on, it was, by my standards at least, a roleplay of good quality.

~Gay-len

[Adam Abel]

I read your rp while on break at work (and responding here too!) and I have to admit I was impressed. I am a sucker for these kind of behind the scenes promos and I thought it was well done.

I liked how you threw some humor in their as well.

I would write more, but writing on the iPhone is annoying!

Overall - good job