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Post by Aurelia Zombie on Jan 27, 2011 10:59:22 GMT -5
I am always open to feedback, so please... If you boys want, feel free to give it. =]
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Post by Dru Tha Merc on Jan 27, 2011 22:16:05 GMT -5
Good opening promo. It sells well, you know. But wait, where are my manners! I am Cori, a.k.a. Dru, resident black man. <_<
AANNNYYYWAAAYYYY...
So here's the interesting situation with your character. She's a chick, and by female standards she sounds like she'd be dangerous enough to face off in Women's Competition, yet she's come to do battle here in Pride. Not enough of a challenge with women?
What's the story? Will we get to learn it. Right now I realize this is just an introductory promo and we will learn soon enough, but I suppose I'm just reading through to garner things about your character. So far I am getting vaguely seductress with sparse amounts of using underestimation to the advantage. We shall see, shall we not?
As I said, good opening promo, still trying to understand what or how your character works, in their angle so to speak? Time shall soon tell.
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Post by Aurelia Zombie on Jan 28, 2011 9:40:20 GMT -5
Hello Cori. =]
Thank you for the feedback. Like I said in the OOC notes on the RP, once I get into the swing of things here, you will see a lot more things from Aurelia. Her character is multi-dimensional, and I plan on showing it off to great lengths.
She's wicked, and you'll learn that soon enough. ^_^
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Post by Trav McBang! on Jan 28, 2011 11:08:14 GMT -5
Wicked, you say?
Synonym for bad
Ra-ra-ah ah ah...........
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Post by Aurelia Zombie on Jan 28, 2011 14:22:23 GMT -5
DAMMIT!
What did I tell you about those fucking Lady Gaga references?
I won't hesitate to shank you, seriously.
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Post by "The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan on Jan 28, 2011 14:53:28 GMT -5
She won't.
I still have the scars.
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Eddie Nash
Regular Pride Poster
These Colours Don't Run
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Post by Eddie Nash on Jan 28, 2011 15:04:26 GMT -5
When I saw that your character looks like a slut, I was hoping he'dact like one too. Instead, we see this "Neo-Femiist" thing that you've got going on whch is a cool angle but to reallygo far you're gonna' need that extra 3D layer you mentioned to pull it off. As a first promo it was promising,you write well and I can agree that you're gonna' b an asset. I'm looking forward to see you develop here really.
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Post by Aurelia Zombie on Jan 28, 2011 15:25:36 GMT -5
Definitely not a slut.
But not afraid to use sexuality as an advantage.
And no feminist type of thing. But, entering in a federation full of men, in my eyes, she has to make it known that yes... She is woman. And you will fucking hear her roar.
As mentioned, she is multi-dimensional. It will become more apparent in the coming weeks.
PROMISE! ^_^
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Post by Trav McBang! on Jan 28, 2011 16:02:43 GMT -5
Sexuality as an advantage in the....game?
...Lovegame?
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Adam Abel
New Pride Poster
Former PWF World Heavyweight Champion & 2009 Advent Cup Champion
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Post by Adam Abel on Jan 29, 2011 20:32:13 GMT -5
I know I am late to this feedback party, but I thought it was really well done and I can't wait to see what else is in store for your character! Welcome to Pride!  |
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Post by Jeremy Sterling on Jan 30, 2011 11:30:22 GMT -5
Sexuality as an advantage in the....game? ...Lovegame? XD + Karma for constant references. |
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Post by Aurelia Zombie on Jan 31, 2011 10:31:58 GMT -5
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