Abel to Find a Angle Feedback

[Adam Abel]

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New (old) character introduced
Melanie's story continues
Adam stands up for the fans
A little more description added but finding its hard for me sometimes.

Let me know what you think!

["The Divine Chaos" Galen Ronan]

I wouldn't worry too much about the detail - it's alright to not have detail at points where it's not necessary, and above all, you shouldn't try to force it. If it doesn't come naturally, write a brief description and move to the next line.

The character development, as always, works well and flows naturally - there's no real 'distinction' where you go 'oh, this is match relevance' to 'oh, this is character development.'

You certainly do know how to set a scene, as well - even without a lot of description, there's a clear mental image and a clear idea of what's going on. It works, and it works well.

I can't really say I have any points to improve upon - I'm left wanting more, as usual, which is always a good thing.