Oblivion Feedback - 7.18.10

[Jeremy Sterling]

Match of the Night -
Moment of the Night -
What was missing -
How it can be improved -
Anything else -

Rating:

[christiankane]

Match of the Night - Four Corner Survival Match
Moment of the Night - I liked the CK segment personally. You guys wrote him perfectly <3
What was missing - Dusty no showed which is a shame but the segment involving him got his presence properly in the show.
How it can be improved - Not much really, there was some grammar and spelling errors, but we're all human so who really gives a shit.
Anything else - Really enjoyed the whole Beat the Clock concept in the show this week, never seen it pulled off so well in e-fedding. Bravo on that.

Rating: 9/10

[Storm]

Match of the Night - I'm going to go with my own, Storm vs. Kaard...mostly because I loved the stuff written for/about DBS, haha. It was hilarious and perfect.
Moment of the Night - I mean...I probably have to go with CK offering Dusty Cocaine.
What was missing - Hard to say on a first show
How it can be improved - I feel like in some of the segments the character's dialogue felt a bit forced, which I can assume Kyle/Jeremy wrote it. Obviously this isn't there fault and means that someone didn't send in a segment, but I'm wondering if it'd be possible to message the people you guys want to use, tell them what's up, and ask them to provide dialogue or maybe just read what you guys write to begin with before it goes live. The ones in particular I felt were a bit off were mine to a certain extent, and Dusty's felt really forced.*
Anything else - Don't think so.

Rating: 7/10 - it was a solid show but its also the first, so I didn't expect anything OMG-amazing, especially since we as a whole are not familiar with all the characters. The matches were all written superbly though - though I'll admit I only skimmed the 4 way, will likely read it a bit more later.



*By the way, I know its hard to do and get the show up in a timely fashion, so maybe we could even have the show go up Monday evening and have a dead day between where people are given a set amount of time to get their segment in or approved, and if not you guys just post your's. I know it'll cut about 24 hours off of how long people have to promo and shit after seeing the new card, but in my experience in PWF not many people post the first day anyway - except me, cause I'm a nerd

And edit to clarify: No, I'm not upset over my dialogue or anything - I was actually more thrown off by Dusty's, lol, but I'm just trying to give ideas for a more "natural" sounding show.

[tommyhargrove]

Match of the Night - Four Corner followed by Eagles and Able

Moment of the Night - Ck and Dusty interacting with each other

What was missing - some feuds, although it is the first week, so i'll go with Seeing everyone post an rp for the card.

How it can be improved - not really sure what it needs to improve, the show seemed pretty good as it was.

Anything else - Not really

Rating: 8.5/10

[____]

Match of the Night - I'm not conceited enough to say Kaard vs. Storm, so instead I'll follow the consensus in saying the four way dance.

Moment of the Night - Christian Kane. Not only winning, but the segment with Dustin was really well done to push both characters.

What was missing - Dustin role playing, but I'm sure he'll be fine. The other thing was, as Storm said, segments from people. Especially this early, people ought to be pushing themselves any way possible.
How it can be improved - Formatting. It's something small but the continuity goes a long way. Example, in my match there was counts inside of the action, that weren't done in any other match. Also, there were times the tri-dots came before, and times after. Also, Callaway's name in his segment. What I might suggest is making something to pin in the information board, as a "template" for how things should be submitted formatting wise.[/i]

Anything else - Congratulations guys, it appears you've got a solid base and the beginning of some solid feuds.

[B. Epic]

Overall I just liked the show, the matches were all full and didn't seem to be lop sided one way or the other(which is a big thing for me, TBH). I enjoyed it.

[Silence]

Match of the Night - Well James may not be conceited enough but I am. Kaard vs Storm was fucking epic!!
Moment of the Night -CK offering coke to the sword of the lord
What was missing - aforementioned sword of the lord
How it can be improved - Just basic editing and format stuff, but it's the first show, it's expected.
Anything else - I FINALLY BEAT STORM!!!!!!

Rating: 8.5/10

[Trav McBang!]

Match of the Night -
Eh, four corners match looked solid.

Moment of the Night -
Christian fucking Kane. First KoP winner in the fed's return. Awesome bit with Dustin Douglas. CK is finally getting the face time that he needs to be a star. <3 Get that World strap, Crissy.

What was missing -
Dru Dallins...AHEM~!

How it can be improved -
More CK? >_> Nah, looked good. Like CK said, fuck off grammar and formatting...it's not a huge deal IMO.

Anything else -
Needs more Dani/Jennifer making out.

Rating:
OCHO PUNTO CINCO!!!!!!!!!!!!!

And I just remembered...NEEDS MORE CAOS~!!!!!

[Storm]

Jul 19, 2010 0:16:12 GMT -5 Silence said:

Anything else - I FINALLY BEAT STORM!!!!!!

Haha. I knew I was fucked as soon as I saw you as my opponent :-p

Grats though, dude.

[Kirk Noble]

Thanks for the feedback guys. It definitely will go into making the show for this week even better, and we promise to take all considerations into thought. And...if someone, for some reason, has a critique they're not comfortable posting on the boards, you are all to contact Jeremy and I, of course.

The next card will be up shortly, most likely within the hour.

[Trav McBang!]

It's cool that your goal is to improve off a spectacular show, Kyle. I guess you just wanna sock it to the competition!

[christiankane]

HAHAHAHAHA

[Kirk Noble]

Definitely catch me on MSN later today. I have pictures. >_>

[kopsamael]

i have a picture too. its a screencap of rey in second death position. i use it as my wallpaperXD

[Obscene]

Match of the Night - Storm/Kaard, the Four Way or Eagles/Abel

Moment of the Night - Hard to pick one, but I was feelin' that dealin'

What was missing - Me beating the clock >_>

How it can be improved - Nothing really. It was flawless except for a few formatting slipups (particularly that Eric Witz thing, it'd be hilarious if next week someone won by Technical Keith Oswalt). The right guys won for the most part, though the four way was close between two. I could tell Parker or Hargrove would win whether my RPs counted or not (if they did, ty).

Anything else - Great segments, well-written matches, loved the commentary, nice work

Rating: 9/10