Onwards to Sexiness! review

[lossexys]

So, what'd you think?

[lossexys]

All I ask is ONE person to review it T_T

[Kirk Noble]

Give it a bit more time. In the meantime, you could review another RP. Pay it forward, you know?

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Patience is one of the Seven Heavenly Virtues. I said in Callaway's thread that I had stuff to do today, I only role played this morning so last night after your role play, once could logically infer I was either working on that, or asleep.

I'm sorry if this sounds blunt as that was not my intention. Just an explanation why I personally, as well as others might not have gotten around to it.

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Patience is rewarded.

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Hey,

First thing, thanks for joining KoP. I don’t recognize you from either Pro Wrestling FIRE or ACW so it’s good to see some fresh blood.

That said, I think this critique won’t be mistaken for a rim job because I personally didn’t enjoy the role play. I think the premise of the characters has a set of flaws and the role play did nothing to dispel it, the typical latin stereotype as the crux of all the humor. It’s a very fine line to walk between being successful with it and falling short and this role play did.

The first thing I’d point out is the failed Spanish. Me gusta is a dependant statement, Latin chick should simply be Latina, Ava Maria, not Marie. I’ve never once heard a women curse as much as the latina did in the opening. I understood the sex sequence trying to convey just how bodacious the character of Rico is but even then, it just seemed forced, a general theme throughout the role play.

Also, a personal interviewer never sits well for me, especially as someone brand new to the company. The company NPC’s are there for a reason and if you need other personalities, there are a number of things, manager, agent etc. The trash talking also was fairly standard, and un original - nothing really to knock him about.

There’s definite room for improvement but I do have confidence things can turn around.

James

[lossexys]

The failed spanish is supposed to be there, but Ave Maria was a fuck up >_<

EDIT: Oh and thank you for the review kind sir. You get karma!

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No, no Karma ... pass it forward.

Karma means nothing, but seeing this board full does.